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Untitled (Sonnet) by camperdfl

After you declared me to be a theif I plotted on taking your life I wanted to crush you like a dry leaf Because you initiated this strife After I said I didn't take your stuff You said what I was saying was a lie You confronted me acting really tough All I could think were ways for you to die I dream'd of gutting you like a pig As I visualized seeing you in pain Or may'be snapping you like a twig Sometimes I feel a little inhumane I had violent visions of your death I wanted to watch you breathe your last breath.

INTRANSIT 25-May-05/2:43 PM
Make the punch-line punchier. Otherwise, a good way to practice the damnable sonnet.




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