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Never Ending Cycle (Free verse) by ingwa

Small and plundering large and thundering strong and powerful white-toped and rolling Gales and breezes blow and turn never ending always moon affected cycle Blue-green walls the hand of God reaches surfers paradise a swimmers worst nightmare Beauty to the eye a great photograph too with still frame animation mists captured for eternity Rocks and cliffs you sculpt and erode changing the landscape on a continuous basis Tsunami and lapping shapes of all kinds distinctly familiar peaceful or raging Never ending it breaks upon the shoreline against the rock sprays a great ride for crabs

ingwa 24-May-05/3:37 PM
DoubleU, thank you so much for the guidance you have provided here. Yes, I do not enjoy hyphenated words too much, but couldn't really think of decent alternatives at the time. I had a mild case of writers block, so was edged on by a good writing friend of mine. It's good constructive criticism that I enjoy and do certainly appreciate it. I'm off now to clear my mind, read it and read it and read it, and then see what can be done about improving it. Thanks again.




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