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In (ghazal) (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

In my truck, I ventilate the world and let it enter me through my windows,as it passes, and stops. My friends enter me as a thought, a presence. I ride fully with them always. Peace is mine, always. The traffic of life is present and I am numb to its presence, within. My friend, myself, one, travelling, two, stationary, feeling the motion and the beauty of the all.

Bhaskaryya 21-May-05/2:16 AM
Is this even a ghazal? I thought ghazals were a string of couplets which made sense individually too. (Like the pearl necklace which looks beautiful while strung together but is worthy of praise while viewed singularly too)

Ghazals have a certain refrain in the 2nd line of every couplet (and both lines of the first) added with a monorhyme before the refrain.

You need to address yourself in the last couplet (called signature couplet)

Well, there are around 50 rules to make a concrete ghazal and this follows none.

I like the content though.....6

PS: I don't post much on this site, but I'd put up few of my ghazals now if you'd like to look at them.





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