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Baggage (3rd ending) (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Such unfortunate things are carried in the genes. A switchblade A ring of unused keys A spare umbilical cord A jolly roger A cat's eye A rabbit's ear A doorknob that came off in the hand. Screaming D.N.A and too many why chromosomes speech impediments extra fingers knees full of arthritis.

Dovina 16-May-05/12:59 PM
I like the genes/jeans thing, but why use such a medical term in the last line when stiff or grating would do? I think that is the question.




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