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Blue (Free verse) by D. $ Fontera

The wind will tell me Secrets in my sleep Some I cannot avoid and It is hard to resist The wind will call me Soldier in my sleep Something I cannot avoid and It is hard to remember The wind will leave me Longing in my sleep Sometimes for things I should avoid but It is hard to restrain The wind will never cease To gust upon my face Somewhere far away from here Somewhere far but somewhere near

DoubleU 12-May-05/7:35 PM
with Can't it would read more fluent. Same with
sometimes for things I should avoid but: 'sometimes for things to avoid but'




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