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Go now if you want it. (Free verse) by Fayt

An otherworld awaits you Don't you give up on it You bite the hand that feeds you. All alone in cold fields you wander Memories of it cloud your sight Fills your dreams, disturbs your slumber Lost your way ... a fallen knight. Hold your aim steady An otherworld awaits you One thousand years ... you ready ? The otherworld it takes you. Go on into the sand and the dust in the sky Go now no better plan than to do or to die Free me, pray to the faith in the face of the light Feed me, fill me with sin and get ready to fight. Hope dies and you wander The otherworld it makes you Dreams they rip asunder The otherworld it hates you Free now ... ride up on it Up to the heights it takes you Go on if you want it An otherworld awaits you.

Fayt 11-May-05/3:49 AM
lol, but yeah i can see what you are saying with my other poem.

I personally like the focus on one word, but, i can see it might be a good idea to take focus off a particular word.




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