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Just Another Poem (Free verse) by Damien

How distant are these minds Are they connected as I write? From my transmitter to your receiver From your receiver to the great teacher This figure of mass opinion Leaving life in this dominion Confusing sentences reaching destinations Creations acknowledged throughout all nations Purposes are born and statuses shown A feeling of being needed is surely grown One life of nothing, another’s dream A surprise of something it did not seem The human race on the bridge of evolution Constantly learning, fleeing confusion Seeking logics behind meaningless paths Slightly backtracking with unneeded Maths With the present being the only time we make a choice I am begging to people of the world, be free and rejoice

jessicazee 3-May-05/2:29 PM
I kind of love that you capitalized "Maths" and also the 3rd & 4th lines are brilliant. Suggestion: leave a space between every two rhyming lines. Not sure, but an idea. Good, I read it 3 times. 9.1.




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