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Tunder (Free verse) by Bakar

My friend his name is timothy i call him timotae his last name is thunder i call him timotae tunder he is native and during gym he passes me a bottle of cooking wine drink he says it is good have some chew he makes me laugh but who can take him seriously he is after all a native

ChaseValentine 27-Apr-05/2:37 PM
A native what? American? Is the last stanza supposed to be ironic?

There are subtle touches to this that I like, but they don't go anywhere at all.




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