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I killed you in New Mexico (Free verse) by sunset sky

I was your temple-worship Hand me down. A temptress in a cave found shivering Reciting lines from Indian gods. Calling silly sounds from mouths of fire. I went grave digging for jewels To replace your haunted eyes. No, you didn't know it But I was your murdering princess Killing what was left of love and memory And you, a love-killer prodigy all worry stricken lightning eyed, cried for her threads to be torn, Kneeling and bleeding to death.

zodiac 27-Apr-05/6:26 AM
You should make the hyphenation consistent. What about "worry-stricken" and "lightning-eyed"?




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