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am i right? (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1

sometimes people look into your eyes and they wonder if your the one. wanting more and more once they look, fighting against love and hope will we ever see the truth? the one time my heart beats faster is for you.

jessicazee 27-Apr-05/1:13 AM
2nd line...should be "you're" instead of "your". You have so much feeling here...try to relate it to us in real language...pretend like you are telling your best friend how you feel in this poem in real words, instead of trying to "write a poem." Because I think you can. More, please.




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