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A new leaf (Free verse) by Damien

A large open space with Shadows covering its surface Vivid images of life slowly starting to flower The smell of the future with a stench of failure Whilst hearing the voices of those who tower us A large open environment with a sense of danger Lights of life beginning there eternal venture A whiff of hope within the stench of judgment Hearing the sound of criticizing minds A vast open creation with a sense of meaning Imagery appearing from the depths of the universe Smell, can you feel the need for life Especially with that voice bringing you up all the time A bounder less energy proud to be the universe Images are not needed as the meaning we rehearse Smell, what smell, I have no nose And that voice is so much help to who ever you know

Goad 21-Apr-05/6:42 AM
This poem is brilliant. Of course, you need to have read http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=123683, and seen the little interplay of comments twixt sonawrote & damien to fully appreciate it as an extended double entendre.




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