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The temple of Dissaray (Free verse) by DeadtotheWorld

These walls are musty, yet glittered stone The temple glows dark, yet still I’m home Theirs no fire to led the way Theirs no light to see my escape We run from the danger as it comes are way For why does it seem that I’m not going anywhere? Where I want to be, Somehow I’m never their Pain Inflicted by misery, torture, and Despair Captured by a thief My screams are never heard A relapse from the past takes place When the walls are closing in, were losing space To breathe, to run or to hide To live a lost life No one knows the trouble you’ve felt, the trouble I’ve felt The trouble we feel, on day alas Are troubles will be surpassed We will be together with love at last For I thought are day would never come But somehow we were victor, beating out everyone

[mojo] 21-Apr-05/12:01 AM
I'm always wary of any poem with "pain" "misery" "torture" and "despair" on ONE line! Seems more than a little angst(y). And "Theirs" should be "There's".




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