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A new leaf (Free verse) by Damien

A large open space with Shadows covering its surface Vivid images of life slowly starting to flower The smell of the future with a stench of failure Whilst hearing the voices of those who tower us A large open environment with a sense of danger Lights of life beginning there eternal venture A whiff of hope within the stench of judgment Hearing the sound of criticizing minds A vast open creation with a sense of meaning Imagery appearing from the depths of the universe Smell, can you feel the need for life Especially with that voice bringing you up all the time A bounder less energy proud to be the universe Images are not needed as the meaning we rehearse Smell, what smell, I have no nose And that voice is so much help to who ever you know

Tintagiles 20-Apr-05/10:14 AM
By tower in Line 4, do you mean 'clap in chains in the tower'? And at the start of the last stanza, do you mean boundless or are we talking about some bounder who'S rather lazy? Just wondering.




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