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Trying to get signed? (Free verse) by Damien

I do not understand this frame of mind I only feel the truth inside it I fly One day I am someone with the highest ambition The next I could be complete if I forget this competition Because if I choose to acknowledge this as a worth full fight I will do something new, as I know how to catch people’s sight I will think of the next big thing not what you bring You humans will be shocked at what evolution sings So I will write and contemplate whilst growing from within Be persistent with my dreams and "just go for it" All I need now is an honest opinion of this If I can write this simply do I have a gift? But stop if you are judging as you scum destroy Leave me be rip me up cant you see I will find joy Can’t you see you’re the key that can begin this process? My expressions will progress, as my mind is not hopeless

ho_hum 19-Apr-05/5:20 AM
Wrong. I said what you made me THINK. I made no assumptions. You, however, have reinforced my opinions that you are just indeed quite insecure. On a second point, I quote THREE of your statements from your poems, from which I assemble a point of view. Not one line only.

What you don't say is whether my opinions of you are accurate. I think most of those who have been on the receiving end to your childish tantrums regarding the marks awarded you would agree with me. What do you think?

ALLOWED, not ALOUD. And even so I don't get your point, are you saying that in some metaphorical sense you are not asking for an opinion on your work?

You also fail to answer the point regarding your (non) use of grammar.

Perhaps the "key that can begin this process" is for you to accept that you could improve your writing, and your response to the comments of others. Especially when said comments are not a direct attack but an honest critique.




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