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15 Minute poem (Free verse) by Damien

Hello my loyal readers are you enjoying my bleapers Are my grammatical terms cheaper than flea keepers Or are you impressed by the way I appear to write Do you cheer my fight to help the fame in sight Yes thats right you are the only beings You can kick off my career or cause my fleeing Either way what I say will be the same regardless You cannot control the thoughts I believe are heartless Nor can you critisize someone who looks to fly We people just want to help you scale new heights I do not know how rare we are within this world Plus I am confused That I may lose what I unfurl And yes I know this looks like I think I'me a god But I'me not obviously we are all the same from the off So cause my fall or spark my rise Either way I look, its just through your eyes

zodiac 18-Apr-05/10:37 PM
Just think how much better this poem would have been if you'd spent 30 minutes on it instead of 15. What were you so busy doing that you couldn't spend another fifteen minutes and made it twice as good? I'll bet you were whacking off to either the blonde daughter or the gothish daughter, or both, on Rosanne.




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