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Birmingham gardens (Prose Poem) by INTRANSIT

It is good that I have come early while spring is still serene. I know how outrageous and demanding she can be. Listening, I hear Whitman running through the tall trees like a small child playing hide and seek with the birds and I can just barely smell the death of fall. I'm still too quick to pay a fountain for something it cannot give until a hot summer day while I wait for the exchange of stone to grass. At thirty-seven, I'm now aware of the specific gravity of my footsteps on the gravel path and I notice the veins running through the bark of the trees and I look at the veins in my arm. It's good to be like moss, the forgotten undergrowth, or a fanning pinecone next to a joking oak. Before I go, I take the time to watch the Koi eagerly gulping in the sliced-tomato sun's color as it warms us both.

zodiac 17-Apr-05/5:53 AM
I think "the death of fall" is misused - and didn't you just say it was spring? And didn't you skip a season? Also, "exchange" alone is better than "exchange rate" (which is too cute). And what's up with the end?




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