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Utensils of creation (Free verse) by Damien

My utensils of creation may mean nothing when I mention, Anything is possible if you hold the right intention, What I am meaning to say don’t get carried away, Be a human without a label that cannot and will not decay, And now I will write to you a guide within my self, It may not reach you but to someone else it may be of help, ---- I will absorb this mass creation today I will find peace, So that when I come across something it cannot backtrack me, I will acknowledge what I found today I will not judge, So that my mind can see the truth for everything it could, I will let go of all the meaning today I will be free, So I can find myself alone in my company I will receive, I will accept enlightenment today I feel like god, So I can share my love with all I should especially those lost, Then will come growth like any natural process, But if I see no improvement I will not feel hopeless, At the end of the day there are no words to say to drastically change your life, Politics prove this through words they miss but there actions control our minds.

Goad 13-Apr-05/1:46 PM
"why don't you try constructive critisism without trying to make sense"

comedy gold, right there.

I hope you realize you're being a grammar nazi nazi. Or is that meta-grammar-nazi? grammar nazi squared?

Since you've clearly never asked yourself this question, let me ask you: what would you say distinguishes "language" from, for example, some series of grunts and hoots a group of baboons might make when another baboon flashes their bright red ass at them (as they are wont to do)? That's right...rules.

Maybe you would feel more comfortable hanging out on baboonpoetryranker.com. You can express your feelings there, with any old series of grunts and hoots, (or more to the point, any old strung together series of incomplete phrases and disjointed aphorisms) and without putting any effort into making your pomes intelligible.

(I apologize for my rampant primatism)




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