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Memory (Free verse) by chocolate9009

I Remember I remember it was a hot sunny day. the birds were chirping the kids where running Especially me, It smelled like a party and sweet treats It taste like fresh air, Then the whole thing just turned around. It tasted like blood, It smelt like rubber doctor gloves. It looked like I don’t know because I couldn’t see. What had happened to me? I was running I looked back and around Skin and Blood fell to the ground. Busted lip and jacked up face. Brick wall brick wall I should've kept my pace.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 2-Apr-05/1:24 AM
Lose alot of the spacing, and give this a little bit of rewriting. Mainly the last line. "Brick wall, Brick wall, I should've kept my pace," would probably sit better as two lines, instead on one. -6-




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