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The Populous (Free verse) by durr_T_hip_E

they run from discontentment and beg for a quiet whispering disconnection in perfect form a water molecule splashing up from a rain puddle under a foot dirty sneakers indicative of experience grey long rain clouds patter necessity to the ground like babies lunging for their right to breathe peacefully dew drops are intently focused upon casual beauty of self a reflection of grasshoppers drowning in this sparkling moment the sidewalk lives less than a block away from any place where oceans collide with sunsets we are warmed here frictionless elements are connected by and by and severed ties remain as the only way to teach unity discontentment disconnects puddle drops from feet we are fleeting carriers

durr_T_hip_E 23-Mar-05/1:37 PM
c tha pre-V-us post re: not respndng to chldsh crap...

i red manny uv yer prevE-us posts n' u hve tha' ablity to giv
good critique/feedback...yet, the majority of tha' time u just focus on nit picking and trying to mold every1 on the site into your vision of what should be...

i dont have the desire to start, nor the need to make myself feel better by, correcting your post...but, to prove a point:

in #7 above:

your needs to be you're....you forgot YOUR rules captain grammar.

peace,

sean

p.s. i hope YOU'RE feeling better about life today




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