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This path (Villanelle) by midnitebeauty101

This path I travel down is worn The old leaves crunch beneath my feet A new me will soon be born I began my walk forlorn Feeling lost and feeling beat This path I travel down is worn Late at night I would mourn Looking out my window; down my street I soon will be reborn My heart gets tugged until it's torn Without which I am not complete This path I travel down is worn The night leaves with promises sworn I arise; the day I'm ready to meet I soon will be reborn It's a new day; a new morn I'm ready for a new feat For this path I travel down is worn A new me will soon be born

tadpole 16-Mar-05/5:18 PM
I don't sense much feeling in the poem, but I bet you have a lot more you could put into it?




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