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Poet, Earth mover (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

As other children bat portently at tetherball and four square a boy walks a hot walk wearing the full weight of his angry red shirt while the heels of his torn bluejeans stir the gravel and dirt that measure the schoolyard fence he pauses only once to mimic the wounded dog howl of a tractors' brakes.

Dovina 10-Mar-05/8:01 AM
You'd do better to just omit the word than yield to their "best" solution. Sure its corrcet, so what. You've traded their approval for what I thought was a better way of saying it.




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