poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Kaleidoscopic (Re-Edit) by Sasha.

zodiac22 Feb 2005

These are the rough lines:

with old components, as you brush or soap,

with stranger friends who blow us off with “Nope,

- I can't say what's wrong with them exactly, except the first one should probably not have a "brush or" and the second is simply too run-on to end with Nope.

I can't remember how it was before. I thought maybe better?