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Piercings (Other) by PsydewaysTears

Some people pierce their ears And wear dangling silver hoops. Some people pierce alone And some only pierce in groups. Some people wait 'til they're old But some, pierce when they're young. Some people pierce their lips And some, will pierce their tongue. Some people pierce their nose Making it hard to sneeze. Some people pierce "down below" But only if they please. Some people pierce a few And some, pierce sixty-three. But me, I have one great piercing And it's where my heart should be.

Dan garcia-Black 16-Feb-05/12:27 AM
I liked the concept and the twist at the end.
Some rhymes could have been a bit "weirder" in keeping with the subject, for example:

Some people pierce "down under"
below the waist; above the knees.

Wait a minute! Does that make it sound like an Australian piercing?
Your poem works for me. -9-




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