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Pedophile (Free verse) by Lenore

I know who you are you scum sucking freak! Your Daddy didn't love you he said you were weak. Your Mamma hid bruises and busted up bones, She left you in squalor with nobody home. Now your a big boy you hold all the power until you see Daddy, He still makes you cower. HA HA!! Your sick and your twisted you know that its true the urges come quickly you know what to do. How many kids before you are done? The F.B.I.'s coming fucker---- How fast can you run?

god'swife 29-Aug-02/10:05 AM
It's complicated because you've set up a rythmn. I think you would have to start a completely different poem, maybe a companion to this one. Don't worry about the rhymning or the rythmn. Right down some images some genuine Lenore thoughts about the subject. Then we can work them out. Be sincere with yourself. Imagine the situation and react to it in a real way. Unfortunately I have to get off. I'm going on a trip. But i'll be back in 3 days. I'd love to see what you come up with just raw and unstylized. Talk with you then.




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