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Piercings (Other) by PsydewaysTears

Some people pierce their ears And wear dangling silver hoops. Some people pierce alone And some only pierce in groups. Some people wait 'til they're old But some, pierce when they're young. Some people pierce their lips And some, will pierce their tongue. Some people pierce their nose Making it hard to sneeze. Some people pierce "down below" But only if they please. Some people pierce a few And some, pierce sixty-three. But me, I have one great piercing And it's where my heart should be.

Dovina 15-Feb-05/11:34 AM
It does lack depth, but that's not what we're complaining about. The line "But only if they please" means absolutely nothing! You put it there only to rhyme with sneeze. That's what a forced rhyme is.




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