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saving myself for marriage (Haiku) by Venus

teasing proud and high ripened cherry on its stem... broken starfish cry

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 29-Aug-02/7:31 AM
As for criticism, shouldn't it be "broken starfish cries"? You only have one, don't you? Or perhaps "broken starfish leaks".




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