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DUI Violation (Free verse) by amateurR

Drunk at the wheel of my life’s car, Crashing and burning Hurting and getting hurt Laughing sadistically Blasting the music on my life’s radio Screaming my song Humming along that haunting tune Of passion and madness Speeding on the highway of my life Driving along fast Coming to a screeching halt I see you in the eye, I feel you in the gut..

Dovina 4-Feb-05/4:47 PM
Good. Try omitting "Driving along fast" and "my" in the line above.




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