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A Little Further (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

This page is full of divits and dents From writing so fierce, over feelings so intense That they left echos through out the book These words make the next that much more broken

Shuushin 4-Feb-05/1:47 PM
could do without the "so", and "that", still very nice.




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