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Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

The mumbles of the wretched man asks "Where is my tranquil repose among the ruins of life?" "Why must it end like this?" Silence follows, quivers add emphasis as they run up his bent spine. Darkness answers. "Fool, it lies beneath you and your righteous arms, hands cupped in the manner of a beggar. The weak may never become whole. They exist merely to serve." Dispirited, the pious one erupts in tears, grimaces in fear and anger, feeling deceived. "I have lived a moral and good life, have harmed no one, obeyed the law, served my country, and never dared to question the wisdom of my superiors! I am owed a place in paradise!" Death laughs. "You had no courage, no spine, no impulse that drove you to take what was yours. You accepted the rhetoric, that you were lacking, so then you renounced your will. Life owes you nothing, and neither do I, coward." Enraged the humble peasant cried "I have resisted the temptations of the devil, and this is how you repay me?" Satan snickers. "You, a slave, were so consumed by fear and awe, that you were unwilling to comprehend fully the meaning of "Being created in his image." and rejected the glory of embracing the truth. So wither as should a servant-- may your ashes fade to dust." Whimpering, the weakling felt the cold embrace of silence and the stillness of death, accepting his chosen fate. He lay rotting, decayed, freed from purgatory, left at the gate of oblivion.

SupremeDreamer 31-Jan-05/5:23 PM
Thank you for not kissing my hairy pimpled ass with a ten. I felt like no one was going to be honest, or objective with the critique... trying to balance it out with Darkie regurgitating his rotating list of english idioms for the phrase "you're retarded." isn't all-together pleasant.

It's pitiful when you get tens for something you wrote which you yourself can not rate higher than eight. Feels like folks are proffering gifts of peace to curb my wicked mood swings from belittling their posts.

I think I'm due for a general public ranker flogging...
Darkie keeping vigilance with his embrowned maturity harness queers the otherwise benefitial by-product of the whole ordeal.




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