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Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray (Other) by PsydewaysTears

Devil, Devil, Hear me pray. Listen close To what I say: I would pay you to tempt me With your every little lie And send to me your malice Wrapped up in a cherry pie. Devil, Devil, Hear me pray. Keep my sobbing Eyes at bay: I would beg you to strike me As a Devil only could. I deserve more to suffer Than to be just understood. Devil, Devil, Hear me pray. Teach me of The wicked way: I would ask you to take me Far away from who I am. I bet there is no one here Who would even give a damn. Devil, Devil, Hear me pray. Take me, Take— Take me away: But if I cannot make you Do to me what you must... I will send me to you With a single, well-placed thrust!

SupremeDreamer 30-Jan-05/4:41 AM
Not bad, not bad, but I have some edits to suggest:


1st Stanza--
Devil, Devil, hear me pray,
listen close to what I say.

2nd Stanza--
I would pay you to tempt me
with your clever little lies,
offer me your cruel malice
wrapped up in a cherry pie.

3rd Stanza--
Devil, Devil, hear me pray;
keep my sobbing eyes at bay.

4rth Stanza--
I would beg you to smite me
As only Lucifer himself could.
I deserve to suffer much more
Than merely being understood.

5th Stanza--
Devil, Devil, hear me pray;
teach me the wisdom of your wicked way.

7th Stanza--
Devil, Devil, hear me pray;
take me, take- take my spirit away:

8th Stanza--
If I can not make you do
to me what you must,
I'll offer my soul to you
with a single direct thrust.


Consider them if you feel so inclined.
Blessed with seven.




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