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Nectar of Infinity (Ode) by MacFrantic

Oh simple waters Green-blue prognosticator What for are you so salty? Daring to escape the coercion of time The rotting wood The worn and weathered stone How you survive them all Oh formless depths Caressing the cellar of life Why such depraved pretension? Swimmingly fraught with contempt The whole of man The chasmal preterition of death How you survive them all

richa 13-Jan-05/6:18 AM
The last verse seems a bit tacked on. The rest is very nice to read but you do know that people don't write like that anymore.




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