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Peptalk in the Dugout (Free verse) by Dovina

Gentlemen! Listen up. Soma you are hard of hearing, so pardon me if I repeat. Let’s have a little less grabbing of crotches out there. The batter’s box is no place for fondling the jewels. Soma you guys reach down there so much it’s surprising you still got two left. Let’s get these gonad adjustments outa the way here in the dugout. I don’t want this team looking like a bunch of preverts. Okay. Let’s play ball!

Dan garcia-Black 12-Jan-05/11:13 PM
-10- The 'preverts' in line 13 is sheer genius. The only improvement I would add might be to change the last word from ball to balls.




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