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Affairs (Free verse) by Stacy Stewart

The candles weren't lit the wine sat untouched the embers softly spoken. For love is not the picturesque compassion we think of; uttering the words of complete chaos that ignites unholy thoughts, unveiling inner desires kept dormant in our sleep. Dreaming of worlds where the candles are lit and roses mean something to us. For this is the downfall of man. And the wine glass was lifted.

Stacy Stewart 6-Jan-05/7:17 PM
"tis" has been edited since it was the wrong word to use i suppose. But embers sofly spoken is correct.....what are embers but burning pieces of wood...what noice do they make...crakling. Instead of saying crackling i used softly spoken.

For the downfall of man, the whole poem leads up to this, for the poem itself is talking about love....and with love that is not "perfect" you have an affair....for that is where the downfall part came in.

Did this clear things up a bit?




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