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Affairs (Free verse) by Stacy Stewart

The candles weren't lit the wine sat untouched the embers softly spoken. For love is not the picturesque compassion we think of; uttering the words of complete chaos that ignites unholy thoughts, unveiling inner desires kept dormant in our sleep. Dreaming of worlds where the candles are lit and roses mean something to us. For this is the downfall of man. And the wine glass was lifted.

Dovina 6-Jan-05/4:40 PM
"embers softly spoken"???
"Tis love is . . . "???? The rest of this sentence is a lumbering flourish.
The conclusion "Tis the downfall of man." is not supported or led up to.




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