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hello eternity (Free verse) by justjay

Hands made of ice- chills to my spine. My mind freezes- but I'm not cold. Words hit like a brick wall- harder then any punch could ever deliver. I do everything to forget- and nothing to remember. I would rather not remember- anything- then remember yesterday. Goodbye today- Hello eternity.

PsydewaysTears 3-Jan-05/9:28 PM
I like your use of the "—". The rest of it's a nice description of a dire emotion but to me it's only a very general emotion since I can't pinpoint which "words" are haunting you exactly or which events you're wishing to "forget" so badly. Though through and through this poem works. The word choice (especially "eternity") pulls it off.

•°•Gregory James•°•




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