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The Big NO (Free verse) by alexander

Impaled upon the stick that was her body She lay gasping in the aftermath Wailing sirens filled the air with their screams She bled internally to a place where dreams die Sounds came in on her like overpowering waves Drowning her with their salty spray She hungered for oblivion A darkness embraced her She said NO

Christof 28-Aug-02/3:43 AM
I like this - mysterious and urgent and visceral. The aftermath of what? Is it rape or her own death to whcih she says NO? I like an enigma like this.




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