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I walk with no road (Free verse) by kawakurdi

I walk with no road I walk without a map, a direction I go anywhere, any location I pray I would have luck You would be there Anywhere You would be there Even more astray than me Looking for a lost luck Even more astray than me Looking for a broken heart I walk without a road I walk without a map, a direction I go to any city, any town, any location I pray I would have luck This year, that year, I would meet last year! I pray I would have luck Time would have no physical track All the world would come there, anywhere And you would be there

Dovina 1-Jan-05/1:35 PM
This could be said with 1/3 as many words and twice the impact.




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