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KAT 2 (Free verse) by nentwined

in the darkness I saw a flame and but a moth I flew a merry dance and journey there and by and by were you. questioning your questions and answering as best I could flitting here and there as well wondering what I should. as i pondered how and when you danced away, my flame and I stared from my distance wishing you back again. i yearned and I strived but my wings would not carry my heart - it was heavy my vision was blurry the damsel with the evil eyes a wicked grin forsooth magnesium glare, aura bright burning for the Truth. questing mind, serpent's tongue lies as lithe as please the freest creature I've ever seen pining to be free.

Shuushin 31-Dec-04/6:37 AM
Very much liked this, NW. I didn't expect the type of language from you, and it's laid in consistently and to good effect.

It flows kindof moth-like, doesn't it?

Great ending.




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