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Intense Irrational Realities (Free verse) by Venus

I wonder... What does yours look like? Is it a caricature, inflated and bombastic, some carnie's imagination working overtime? Or is it merely a series of loosely connected lines and squiggles, as if drawn on an etch-a-sketch? Maybe it's a scenic dreamscape, majestic and romanticized, still, pithy, a Winslow cradled in antique gold? I wonder... Could it resemble mine?

<~> 27-Aug-02/11:27 PM
is this one of those, 'i'll show you mine' jobbers? heheheh. seriously, though, you could tighten this by dropping 'child's' in s3--it's unnecessary; maybe say 'cradled in antique gold'
? musings, musings...




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