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That One Time Last Summer, Remember? (Free verse) by jessicazee

First a berry stain on your pine needled sole, and you just say "look at the fire I made" It's a quick death, a campfired moth. Ash so light, wings disappear, flying, dying again toward the canopy. The shower drips all night, mulberry trees whisper, "please shake us" "we need to let things go"

jessicazee 13-Dec-04/3:19 PM
Thanks for the nice comments, everyone. I'll think what to do with the shower line. You're right, it's clunky.




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