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Inane Muttering (Free verse) by Don-Quixote

Your hushed whispers said nothing- it was just your voice and blither that was somehow calming. In those twilight moments, they were a welcomed occurrence- since I wasn't listening. Brushed away my worries unwound the anxiety- letting me drift to whatever dream was forming in my mind then. Thats how you always convinced me everything was fine- and now, without it I'm left submerged, flailing. The worst of it?- waiting. Which ultimately?- changes nothing. But your whispers?- made me press on. Simplicity accomplished alot; things aren't so simple now.

Don-Quixote 11-Dec-04/5:23 AM
Would you be kind enough to say why you didn't like the last lines of the last five stanzas? Just so I'm made aware of it's flaws.

Thank you for reading and commenting on my piece, I've always had a fondness for your work, and it's an honor to receive your feed-back.




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