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keep on digging (Free verse) by nentwined

How many levels of hell are knocking on your door? They tell me the steps to eden are just beyond the floor. And all I've got to do is keep on digging keep on digging and this grave will lead me there.

richa 9-Nov-04/2:35 PM
I would replace the first two lines. A level knocks on a door?!. The second line is plain inelegant. And I would write more.




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