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Down (Free verse) by phauge

Down with me down with you with war with cars with lights with games with pizza with turtles Down with stories down with jokes with paper with markers with screwdrivers with mountains with sitcoms with paper cups Down with pain down with sorrow with religion with fat with twist-tie cables with poetry with radio with canned tuna Down with me down with you

edpeterson 8-Nov-04/9:12 PM
now this i think is kinda funny and kinda good.

if only you had made the half rhyme of tuna and you a bit more obvious....still a 10




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