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Just Shut Up! Everyone Just Shut Up! (Ode) by MacFrantic

or "An Ode to My Idiot Relatives" Oh how your creeping Meatballism sings to me A chorus of many dunces United in brazen melody What for has this arisen That we should not share An affinity but of blood Much less civil than fair So let us just sit here Amongst all the guests And listen to whose Drunken diatribe sounds best

Dovina 8-Nov-04/2:24 PM
Good, except for the diatribe title and first line. It's better to remain subtle.




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