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Archivist of Emotion (Free verse) by Dovina

Past contradictions reflect from her shaking body, and you think her laugh is at your joke. A thirty-year-old word has spawned that frown, and you think it was your fault. If her broad smile lightens your load, be careful, my friend. She remembers one from long ago and has you mistaken. Her present is old, her past is present. You are but a substitute, an illumined image.

Dan garcia-Black 14-Oct-04/7:27 PM
Lose the 'but' in line 15. The object of the poem must know what's up by line 11. Why beat him down further with your but?




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