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Shattered (Haiku) by Aetius

Sharp-edged glass fragments: There are things one should not touch ... Like broken friendships.

Dovina 14-Oct-04/5:05 PM
I agree that the punctuation is not needed.

Haikus are supposed to be 5-7-5, thus the "There are" in line 2. But those words are so trite here that I'd omit them. Otherwise good.




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