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Old Man (Free verse) by Rollsoftoiletpaper

Old Man, Old Man. Where has the time gone? I remember, I once feared you. When you came in the night with your hand held up high. I shut my eyes and loved you. Old Man, Old Man. Where has your shield gone? I remember, I once hurt too. When you told me your lies and made us all cry. I shut my eyes and loved you. Old Man, Old Man. How dare you say that I've done anything wrong in my life. I know you don't care about the ring that you wear and still, Old Man, I love you.

lukehanney 10-Oct-04/1:18 PM
A mysterious, yet nice poem. We don't know who the 'Old Man' is and the repition of that phrase is very effective.




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