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Boys with Guns (Free verse) by Hostileintent

Have you ever seen a picture A picture taken of a child A child with a gun, who has never seen the fun The fun that the gun deprived Have you ever seen a picture A picture taken for To show the Grotesque Obscenity The Obscenity Grotesque, the Grotesque Obscenity of war Who ever heard of the boy soldier Those essential elements of war Disgusting, Disgusting. I’m Disgusted. Disgusting The Grotesque Obscenity of war Have you ever seen a picture Of a boy, without a home A picture, a boy, no home- a war The Grotesque Obscenity of war

eliastemplar 6-Oct-04/9:41 AM
You use a lot of repetition in this poem, but I think the repetition is apropriate. War is suffering and corruption ad nauseum ad nauseum. I speak from experience. I think the world today is severely lacking in feminine influence, and we will all suffer until this imbalance is righted. So much is being wasted. It is not even clearly understood why we are fighting. I wish I were not here. I am probably losing my marbles. Thankyou.




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