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FALLING ASLEEP (Free verse) by AM I EVIL?

its late at night so now you sleep lay your head down to count those sheep close your eyes just drift away get well rested for the next day thoughts in mind coming and going late dreams just start flowing now its early morning almost dawn but that dont matter cuz your still gone

redneck_woman3322 20-Sep-04/9:54 AM
This is a good poem, I really did like it it's a sad poem...because the last line tells us that the person is gone....a lot more could be added to the poem emotionally if you worked on this one....but it is still very good....( I hope you didn' t mind me giving advise, not the best at it...)




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