thepinkbunnyofdoom7 Sep 2004

Okay your missing several small details, "a smile that stops me in my tracks", "And sure enough like a deleted scene
The best part of our story
ended up on the screen",

NLD is painting with words, poetry. True it could be better but not by much. I mean the starting out with a ryhme scheme and then doing away with it utterly until the end was a little jutting at first but it was better for his narration of the thoughts and feeling being displayed.